Kia ora Lily, It is hard to wake up and get going when the cat is so relaxed and sleepy! It sounds like you have busy mornings. It would be a good idea to use paragraphs to show the different parts of your morning. I like the eye-catching title and clear,bold font.
Hi Lily! My name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School. Awesome work! I really liked your writing, you described it really well and I understood what was happening really well.
I'm an early riser, so I wake up at about 6-7 usually no later then 7:30, I change and eat breakfast and I get on with my school work. Are you a early riser or night owl? Or maybe a bit of both?
To improve, maybe you could re-read some of the sentences, there are a few grammar errors. Just fix those and it will be amazing!
Kia ora Lily, It is hard to wake up and get going when the cat is so relaxed and sleepy! It sounds like you have busy mornings. It would be a good idea to use paragraphs to show the different parts of your morning. I like the eye-catching title and clear,bold font.
ReplyDeleteHi Lily! My name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School. Awesome work! I really liked your writing, you described it really well and I understood what was happening really well.
ReplyDeleteI'm an early riser, so I wake up at about 6-7 usually no later then 7:30, I change and eat breakfast and I get on with my school work. Are you a early riser or night owl? Or maybe a bit of both?
To improve, maybe you could re-read some of the sentences, there are a few grammar errors. Just fix those and it will be amazing!
Awesome work!
Mia