Kia ora Lily, It is hard to wake up and get going when the cat is so relaxed and sleepy! It sounds like you have busy mornings. It would be a good idea to use paragraphs to show the different parts of your morning. I like the eye-catching title and clear,bold font.
Hey Lily, Rhys here from T1. This is a nice piece of descriptive writing, I like the background colour because it isn't too bold. Just one thing, you don't need to say the exact time e.g. "it was early morning". Does your cat always wake up next to you? Stay safe!
Hi Lily! My name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School. Awesome work! I really liked your writing, you described it really well and I understood what was happening really well.
I'm an early riser, so I wake up at about 6-7 usually no later then 7:30, I change and eat breakfast and I get on with my school work. Are you a early riser or night owl? Or maybe a bit of both?
To improve, maybe you could re-read some of the sentences, there are a few grammar errors. Just fix those and it will be amazing!
Kia ora Lily, It is hard to wake up and get going when the cat is so relaxed and sleepy! It sounds like you have busy mornings. It would be a good idea to use paragraphs to show the different parts of your morning. I like the eye-catching title and clear,bold font.
ReplyDeleteHey Lily, Rhys here from T1. This is a nice piece of descriptive writing, I like the background colour because it isn't too bold. Just one thing, you don't need to say the exact time e.g. "it was early morning". Does your cat always wake up next to you? Stay safe!
ReplyDelete- Rhys
Hi Lily! My name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School. Awesome work! I really liked your writing, you described it really well and I understood what was happening really well.
ReplyDeleteI'm an early riser, so I wake up at about 6-7 usually no later then 7:30, I change and eat breakfast and I get on with my school work. Are you a early riser or night owl? Or maybe a bit of both?
To improve, maybe you could re-read some of the sentences, there are a few grammar errors. Just fix those and it will be amazing!
Awesome work!
Mia